Hey!! I’ve discovered this webcomic recently and I’ve really enjoy it so far. The characters are likeable, the art is really cute and cartoonish, and I like that most event in the story actually have some relevance or plot importance later. Like for example, at the start when the explosion caused such a havoc in the village, I thought that when you introduce the concept of the elder, it would be kinda of dumb to see that the village didn’t have some kind of police equivalent to go see what was that big explosion, but you actually maked it not only into something that exist, but also plot relevant, since it kicked out the entire story.
As for now, the only thing I’ve been wondering about the future of the comic, are mostly about Lore and it’s objective. As for clues, this story really points about being a post-human world with rest of the civilization still present in the world, but, why in a cave? why is there such a big cave that contains that technology? it would be interesting to see how you show your readers how this world was make and its importance to the actual story.
Also, other thing would be maybe some backstory for the characters, like, something to explain their relationship beside their usual interaction. Like, why does Lider and Apocado know Portazo and Artifice? why does Lider and Apocado know each for so long, and, considering Abocado’s problems with her mental state, why does she keep hanging out with him? What’s with Liders personality, why is he so adventurous? Also, what was that expedition that made Lider’s mom go out? Also, what about his dad? Did he was a scientist becuse he lost her wife, or becuse he was one before that? How did he make the lamp?
Other thing that is interesting is the amount f new character that are introduced. While is good to have a lot of characters to make the world more rich, is also a problem when is so full that the author doesn’t know what to do with them anymore as long as the story continues. I hope you don’t oversaturate the story and only leave the characters that are important. I mean, Lider’s dad seemed plot relevant, but it was only a plot device to give them the lamp that, as for now, has not been used.
Has I’ve said, the story is promising and as for now, a fun ride, and I’ll really recommend you to take these recommendations to make it even more interesting than it already is.
As for now it seems like it doesn’t have a clear focus, since “Exploring the cave” is something pretty vage, but considering the post human civilization part and the lost mom thing, I’m sure you’ll find a way to solve these doubts.
Also, I’ve seen that you’ve dealed with some heavy stuff, so, overall, my biggest recommendations for this, is for you to take as much time as you need, and when you fell fine and with some energy, come back to work on the story, after all, pushing yourself might be worse for the story at the end. Just have fun making this!
Wow. Thank you for writing such an in-depth comment on my work. I appreciate it and have taking a lot of your points to heart.
Trust me, everything that have happened in the last two stories are important to the overall comic story, and are necessary for the progression of events.
We’ll get more backstory on the characters and events as the story progresses, the focus at the moment are to give the characters some breathing room to let the readers get to know them and have their moments to shine, as well as introduce some important and needed secondary characters.
Hey!! I’ve discovered this webcomic recently and I’ve really enjoy it so far. The characters are likeable, the art is really cute and cartoonish, and I like that most event in the story actually have some relevance or plot importance later. Like for example, at the start when the explosion caused such a havoc in the village, I thought that when you introduce the concept of the elder, it would be kinda of dumb to see that the village didn’t have some kind of police equivalent to go see what was that big explosion, but you actually maked it not only into something that exist, but also plot relevant, since it kicked out the entire story.
As for now, the only thing I’ve been wondering about the future of the comic, are mostly about Lore and it’s objective. As for clues, this story really points about being a post-human world with rest of the civilization still present in the world, but, why in a cave? why is there such a big cave that contains that technology? it would be interesting to see how you show your readers how this world was make and its importance to the actual story.
Also, other thing would be maybe some backstory for the characters, like, something to explain their relationship beside their usual interaction. Like, why does Lider and Apocado know Portazo and Artifice? why does Lider and Apocado know each for so long, and, considering Abocado’s problems with her mental state, why does she keep hanging out with him? What’s with Liders personality, why is he so adventurous? Also, what was that expedition that made Lider’s mom go out? Also, what about his dad? Did he was a scientist becuse he lost her wife, or becuse he was one before that? How did he make the lamp?
Other thing that is interesting is the amount f new character that are introduced. While is good to have a lot of characters to make the world more rich, is also a problem when is so full that the author doesn’t know what to do with them anymore as long as the story continues. I hope you don’t oversaturate the story and only leave the characters that are important. I mean, Lider’s dad seemed plot relevant, but it was only a plot device to give them the lamp that, as for now, has not been used.
Has I’ve said, the story is promising and as for now, a fun ride, and I’ll really recommend you to take these recommendations to make it even more interesting than it already is.
As for now it seems like it doesn’t have a clear focus, since “Exploring the cave” is something pretty vage, but considering the post human civilization part and the lost mom thing, I’m sure you’ll find a way to solve these doubts.
Also, I’ve seen that you’ve dealed with some heavy stuff, so, overall, my biggest recommendations for this, is for you to take as much time as you need, and when you fell fine and with some energy, come back to work on the story, after all, pushing yourself might be worse for the story at the end. Just have fun making this!
Wow. Thank you for writing such an in-depth comment on my work. I appreciate it and have taking a lot of your points to heart.
Trust me, everything that have happened in the last two stories are important to the overall comic story, and are necessary for the progression of events.
We’ll get more backstory on the characters and events as the story progresses, the focus at the moment are to give the characters some breathing room to let the readers get to know them and have their moments to shine, as well as introduce some important and needed secondary characters.